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Water shortage is a dangerous problem in the world. Discuss the consequences and solutions for this problem? And do the social media or newspapers spread the awareness among people? And examples which are relevant.

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Today all nations are worried about limited sources of
water
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 in the world so it has very big problems and terrible results. We should find a way to give information to
people
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 with social
media
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 and find the best solution for it. On the one hand, earth has limited
water
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 resources and population growth in recent years so if we
use
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water
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 without my plan maybe one day we or our children have not any
water
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 for drinking. So we should have a useful plan for using
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. Everybody can make some rules which say about managing
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 in their home and
people
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 should follow them .
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, families can make a rule that
people
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 should
use
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water
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 in the bathroom for a limited time ,
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people
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 can wash dishes with washing machines to
use
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 less
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 ,
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 government should provide support to
people
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 who try to
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 lower
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 .
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, give them less money for their
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 prices.
On the other hand
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, today
people
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 can affect another person through social
media
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.
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,
People
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 who have a variety of information about limited sources of
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 can share their knowledge with other
people
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 and show them a future with less
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 .
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, give them easy solutions to reduce their
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 usage.
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, inform them that they don't
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 drinking
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 for washing clothes.
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, nowadays everyone has a smartphone that can be on social
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 and it has very powerful
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 that everyone's attention to them. We should best
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 of it for
people
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 who live in future. In conclusion, we have limited
water
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 on our earth and we should manage our habits of using
water
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. We can affect other
people
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 by social
media
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 and improving their information and giving them useful solutions.
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