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The internet has become a common source of people to find information about medical issues, rather than going to see a doctor, is this positive or negative development?

Nowadays more and more people opt to search on the
internet
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information
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for information
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 about medical issues
instead
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 of seeing a doctor. In my
opinion
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this
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 is a positive development because allows people to be informed and avoid them paying and waiting for unnecessary appointments.
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,
due to
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 the
effectiveness
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 that technology offers, it is possible to search for any type of disease.
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 we can not trust
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every source of
information
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, there are some online platforms where doctors are constantly updating material
of
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on
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 what we should do to stay healthy, and giving advice on how to treat and
relief
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relieve
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 headache symptoms,
cold
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colds
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 or flu.
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,
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 a recent quiz, 75% of the population in Uruguay said that they can sort out what they have to do to feel better, by reading online
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.
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, for those who are struggling with money, and can not afford a medical consultation, as long as they are not having a serious health problem, the
internet
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 is a free way to find what to take and how to feel better.
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, sometimes it is hard to find an available soon appointment.
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, for these cases, the
internet
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 is a useful tool to solve the problem sooner. One research article suggests that individuals were paying for a doctor consultation just to know what cream they should use for a pimple, or to receive advice on what moisturized use for the face.
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,
internet
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 material has been increasingly effective
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 the medical issues
information
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 we can find and to solve non-serious health problems,
nevertheless
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 doctors do not have to be supplanted by

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