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Some people believe that reading stories from a book is a better than watching TV or playing computers game for children to what extend do you agree

Many members of the puplic believe that reading a story form a
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 is much helpfull than watching movies or playing computre
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 for the minors.I totally agree with
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 statment they should read and learn usefull information that would help them in the future. Experts say that kids must read a
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 rather than watching TV or playing online
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.I agree they should always be reading a
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 and prefer a
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 over movies or
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.
Books
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 are much usefull and immportant to there age every pearnt should make there sons and dughters read as much stories as they can.There are many excellent information in the
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 that would benfit them in there future.To illustrate
books
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 can advocate them to choose there univirsty major or start a business of somthing they like that profits them.
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 other individuals claim that
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 has no use nor any benifts.They believe that minors should experince going out and socialize insted of wasting
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 time on reading.
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 one of
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 claims is that
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 are boring and on kid wants to read about scince or the space they should play and study insted oh
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 nonesence.They presume that every child would chose watching TV and playing
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 than reading.The members of the society clarified that authors should start working more on
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books
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 and make them much intertaining for a child to read since there not that creative with
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books
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 so it makes it a bit boring for them to read.addition to that
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 take a long period of time to read that makes it hard for a minors to complete so
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 makers should focus on writing stories that are not too long so thet can enjoy and be entertained. In conclusion, I think mothers and fathers should encourge
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 children to read more and offer them kids friendly stories that dont take ages to finish and contain usefull information that help with there knowladge.

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Make sure to clearly state your main idea in the introduction. Explain it more fully.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
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Check for spelling and grammar mistakes, especially with word forms like 'helpful' and 'children'.
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You express a clear opinion about the importance of reading for children.
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You provide some examples of the benefits of reading.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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