This diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
graph illustrates how hydroelectric power station
can be produced electricity Fix the agreement mistake
stations
This
writing will be done by giving a big picture and the details of flow.
Overall
hydroelectricity produced
Add a missing verb
is produced
from
Change preposition
by
river
and it will Add an article
the river
processing
in the morning to afternoon Change the verb form
process
be processing
While
the process will be stopped at night. In this
process, there is one machine that will be used a
generator It contains three main processes.
Change preposition
as a
Firstly
, the water
from river
is flowing to the dam, which will be opened Add an article
the river
a river
at
Change preposition
in
day
, Correct article usage
the day
then
it will taking
the Wrong verb form
take
water
into
power generation. Change preposition
for
Secondly
, this
liquid will be processed in generator
and Correct article usage
the generator
finally
the power lines will be produced. At night, the generator Add a comma
,finally
not
operated and there are two stages to the Add a missing verb
is not
water
turn back. First,
the water
will be pumped into high-level
reservoir. Correct article usage
a high-level
Last
the water
will be stayed at the pipe because the dam is closing during this
time. The process will be repeated the same every day during day
and nightCorrect article usage
the day
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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