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The graph below shows the qatari import totals( in tons) for several types of vegetables from 1980 to 2020.

The graph below shows the qatari import totals( in tons) for several types of vegetables from 1980 to 2020.
#qatari #import #tons #vegetables
The pie chart illustrates how much the
qatari
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sell
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 different types of vegetables between 1980 and 2020.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 all plants increased except Ginger until
last
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 period.
Whereas
,the Spanish had
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a singnificantly
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singnificantly
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significantly
 decreased trend. Following
to
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the graph,the
spanish
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Spanish
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 accounted for 500 in
first
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 year.After
that
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 it experienced
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a dramasticlly
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dramasticlly
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dramatically
drastically
fell
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 down to 350
in
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at
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 the end of
year
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the year
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. In another hand,the
greaph
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graph
 of Ginger increased by 60 in 2000 and reached
to
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the
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highest point at 310 in 2000.Turning to
plant
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the plant
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of
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Peas, it was stable
from
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 1980 and 2000, which was followed by a slightly rose 20 in 2020.The figure
of
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 garlic went up by 60, by 40 between
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the period
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period
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periods
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 given respectively.And
then
 it experienced
increase
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by
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of
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 400 in the
last
 year.The quantity of broccoli,
rosed
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rose
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 by 100 from 200 to 300 from 2000 to 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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