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The diagram gives the details of alteration that occurred at Queen Mary Hospital since its building in 1960.

The diagram gives the details of alteration that occurred at Queen Mary Hospital since its building in 1960.
The diagram gives the details of
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the alteration
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alteration
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alterations
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 that occurred at Queen Mary Hospital since its building in 1960.
Overall
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, a comparison of the three maps
illustrate
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illustrates
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 a change over the
period
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 in question. Between the years
of
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apply
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1960 to 1980, the main road experienced significant changes except for a hospital and a
car
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park
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.The shopping mall was cleared to make way for a cancer centre and pharmacy.
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,
the
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apply
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Farmland was converted into a nursing school. The buildings of
hospital
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the hospital
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 and
car
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park
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were remained
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remained
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 unchangeable over the
period
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 of 20 years. In 2000, the cancer
center
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centre
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 is extended to cover the entire and
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consequently
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 the
car
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park
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 was divided into two, and it included a small nursing school and
car
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park
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.
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, the pharmacy and hospital were unaltered over a
20 year
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20-year
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period
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 from 1980 to 2000. Over the
period
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, the
main land
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mainland
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 was turned into hospital facilities except for the 
car
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park
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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