Some people think that it's a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it's important to keep working life completely seperate from social life.

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the majority of our daytime (or nighttime,
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on the job) our colleagues are
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important part of our social
life
. We see them
everyday
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and we usually have to interact with them many times. Do those interactions have to stay strictly professional or is it better
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then
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in our private
life
?
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depend
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depends
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on everyone's
personnality
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personality
. Some
people
are good to keep distance during
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working
time
's interaction,
keep
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neutral conversations and
seprate
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separate
clearly
the
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private
life
and professional
life
. On
a
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other
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side, some
people
can't control it and their
personnality
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personality
will push them to be friendly with
people
who
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they get
along with
or be distant
tp
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to
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people
with
who
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they feel
inconfortable
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comfortable
uncomfortable
. In fact, it is important to feel good at
work
. A heavy atmosphere caused by tensions between coworkers could
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very badly out
life
even when we come back home.
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with
work
colleagues in
the
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their
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free
time
can be
good
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occasion to know
people
better, away from the working stress and pressure. We can discover another part of
personnality
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personality
, hobbies. or
personnal
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personal
problems and
then
we can be more able to understand them during hard
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times
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at
work
. Of course sometimes
in
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an
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the
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other
hand
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some matters can appear when
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between private and professional
life
start
be
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fuzzy.
For example
, when two coworkers
becam
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became
a couple and continue to
work
together or when a friendship between two workers can be
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start
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point. But since we are all humans with our own sensitive points, it is important to
be keep
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keep
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a good atmosphere at
work
by speaking out all the problems to release all the tensions. Communication is the key but
also
sharing a good
time
with coworkers away from
work
can be a nice way to understand
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each other.
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  • supportive work environment
  • personal growth
  • diverse perspectives
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