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Some people think that it's a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it's important to keep working life completely seperate from social life.

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Since our job
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 the majority of our daytime (or nighttime,
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 on the job) our colleagues are
a
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 important part of our social
life
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. We see them
everyday
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 and we usually have to interact with them many times. Do those interactions have to stay strictly professional or is it better
including
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then
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 in our private
life
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?
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that's
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depend
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 on everyone's
personnality
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personality
. Some
people
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 are good to keep distance during
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working
time
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's interaction,
keep
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 neutral conversations and
seprate
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separate
 clearly
the
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 private
life
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 and professional
life
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. On
a
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the
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other
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 side, some
people
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 can't control it and their
personnality
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personality
 will push them to be friendly with
people
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who
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 they get
along with
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 or be distant
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to
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people
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 with
who
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 they feel
inconfortable
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comfortable
uncomfortable
. In fact, it is important to feel good at
work
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. A heavy atmosphere caused by tensions between coworkers could
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 very badly out
life
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 even when we come back home.
Socialize
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 with
work
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 colleagues in
the
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their
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 free
time
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 can be
good
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a good
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 occasion to know
people
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 better, away from the working stress and pressure. We can discover another part of
personnality
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personality
, hobbies. or
personnal
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personal
 problems and
then
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 we can be more able to understand them during hard
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time
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times
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 at
work
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. Of course sometimes
in
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on
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an
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the
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 other
hand
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 some matters can appear when
line
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the line
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 between private and professional
life
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 start
be
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 fuzzy.
For example
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, when two coworkers
becam
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became
 a couple and continue to
work
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 together or when a friendship between two workers can be
gossips'
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start
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starting
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 point. But since we are all humans with our own sensitive points, it is important to
be keep
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keep
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 a good atmosphere at
work
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 by speaking out all the problems to release all the tensions. Communication is the key but
also
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 sharing a good
time
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 with coworkers away from
work
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 can be a nice way to understand
more
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each other.
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