In most countries, young people form a large proportion of those who are unemployed. Why this is the case, and what can be done to solve the problem?

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, unemployment for young
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has become a main concern in many countries.
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phenomenon is believed to have certain causative factors, effective policies can be adopted to remedy
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situation. As
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to the root causes, there are two which should be taken into consideration.
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, they
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not be
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. To be more specific,
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luck
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of enough education which is one of the needs for finding a suitable
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is a cause for the
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Who looking for.
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, many young
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after completing their
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degree, maybe do not have
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to continue their education and they start to find a
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they will not be able to find that.
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, disinterest is another important cause for young
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to be unemployed.
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, if they do not have motivation, they will not try enough to find a
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for themself.
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, there could be a few
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opportunities which are related to their field of study, so
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they are not enthusiastic to work. There are
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some solutions to tackle
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issue.
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with,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
can solve
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by encouraging trade
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to hold companies. It is to say that, by holding companies they will
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fir
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new employees,
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apply
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it
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will lead to creating
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opportunities.
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, by holding training
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by authorities,
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of problems with unemployment will be solved.
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example
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tailoring is an art that can help young
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who are
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interested
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both learn and start working.
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, the main contributing factors behind unemployment are
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the luck
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luck
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lack
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of speciality and interest that need to curb the tide by implementing the right policies like holding new companies and training
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