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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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This
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 table gives information about customers’ expenditures in terms of three different categories which are food/drink/tobacco, clothing/footwear, and
leisure
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/
education
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 in five different countries in 2022.
Overall
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, consumers’ expenditures on food, drinks, and tobacco in five different states had the highest
percentage
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.
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 clothing and footwear were the second most consumable items on the table.
Whereas
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 the least
amount
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 was spent on
leisure
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 and
education
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.
According to
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 the information, a large
percentage
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 of food, drink, and tobacco expenditures belong to Turkey and Ireland which were 32.14% and 28.91% respectively.
In contrast
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, Spain, Italy, and Sweden’s population spent less
amount
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 on household items and their percentages are 18.80%, 16.36%, and 15.77% respectively. It is noted that Italians spend more
amount
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 on clothing and footwear which was 9%, followed by the Turkish community (6.63%) and the Spanish 6.51%).
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, Turkey is the only country that focused on
leisure
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/
education
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 and had 4.35% which is the highest
percentage
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 among all 5 countries.
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, Sweden, Italy, and Ireland had a modest
percentage
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 of
leisure
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/
education
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.
While
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 Spain paid the least
amount
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 of money for
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 domain.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words leisure, education, percentage, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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