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Some think that private companies should pay for cleaning up pollution, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss and state your own opinion.

#think #companies #pollution #government’s #responsibility
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Fewer people feel that the corporate
sector
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 should be liable for cleaning up
pollution
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.
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on
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 the other hand somebody thinks that it is the government,s responsibility
.
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This essay
this
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 eassy will describe the cleaning population as should the responsibility of the
govt
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. or private
sector
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.
Firstly
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 we have seen in
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apply
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society that many private sectors
has
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 taken some
initiative
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 to clean the
pollution
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.we can get a big example in Cox, Bazar sea beach.Many NGOs have taken the
initiative
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 to clean the
pollution
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 in the beach
area
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.
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, some corporate
sector
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 has provided donations to clean up in some
city
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 areas and parks
beside
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they are influencing the people to clean the
area
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.
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 the
govt
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. is taking the
initiative
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 to clean the
pollution
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 in some
city
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 areas.
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 Month we went to Rajshai for my official job.
i
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 am really pleased to see the
city
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 environment.The
Govt
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 has taken
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initiative
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the initiative
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 to clean the
city
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area
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furthermore
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 they have invested in the
beatification
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beautification
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 of the
city
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area
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.
It
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I
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 was really amazed to see the sea in the
city
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. In conclusion.the private
sector
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 and the
govt
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,
sector
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 both of them should take the responsibility to clean the
pollution
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 that I make a good environment in society.
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Your opinion

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