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The government should pay for the college fees for everyone who wants to study at the University. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

#government #college #fees #study #university
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There is a hot debate about whether everyone's
tuition
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 in college should be paid by the government.
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 it will increase the population's education level if our government paid for us, it will become a burden and have more side effects. If
governments
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 pay the
tuition
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,
students
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 might not work hard like before. People will seldom cherish something they get them free ,especially
students
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 who have not experienced a lot of hard times in their life. If the
governments
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 help with the
tuition
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 part,
students
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 might take it for granted and
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 they stop studying harder than the
students
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 now who mostly get the
tuition
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 from their parents and they know how much work their parents do in order to pay the
money
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 for them.
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 a kind of waste of resources
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 as teachers' time and energy with a bunch of careless
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. Other parts which need
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 to invest
money
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 in will be influenced.
Governments
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' revenue is limited. If the government put greater
money
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 into paying college
students
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'
tuition
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, they have to reduce the fund from establishing other facilities
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 as repairing roads.
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, more people can not share the interests they should have despite paying the same amount of taxes.
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, from a long-term view, it is not a good idea that
governments
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 pay
money
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 to
students
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.
Students
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 might lose motivation to study. Individuals can not have the same benefits from
governments
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 as before. In my opinion, it is pointless that
governments
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 pay the
tuition
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 for college
students
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.
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