Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is sometimes argued that foreigners should pay more money than residents for visiting cultural and historical

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. I totally disagree

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argument and

also

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will explain

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To begin

with, tourists are already paying

considerable

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amount of money in that country. To put it another way, foreigners tend to buy

gift

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for memory

as well as

, they are spending on hotels, restaurants and pubs.

Also

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another reason that I

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this

statement is local people are already paying through

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system for maintaining and

renewing

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cost

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.

For

this

reason, there is no way to charge visitors compared to the locals.  In the second place, if foreigners acknowledge that they are paying more than residents to visit historical and cultural

attraction

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in

particular

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nation, they might choose not to travel

that

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country

as a consequence

, there will be few visitors

in

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cultural areas. It will be

huge

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drawback to

touristic

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places

which earn their income through visitors.

As a result

, historical

places

will deteriorate because

of

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local authorities can not maintain

without

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funds like these historical

places

anymore.

Moreover

, it is more important than money which is,

archeological

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remains are recognized by people.

This

is the real value of historical and cultural

places

in the truth.

To sum up

, charging more

travelers

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is particularly beneficial to finance

of

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local

places

however

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, it is not

great

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idea

to

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development

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the development

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of cultural attractions. The decline of tourism and

unattraction

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the unattraction

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of historical

places

would

be affect

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that particular

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the popularity of that particular place

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popularity

furthermore

, it will be hard to sustain

places

like these.