Many students choose to study at colleges and universities that are far away from the places where they grew up. Do the benefits of this outweigh the drawbacks?

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Numerous graduates select to continue their education at universities and colleges that are remote from their homelands.

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studying in different countries has financial difficulties, I believe that its advantages surpass the disadvantages because it

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them new experiences. Studying in a different state has additional expenses which is the major drawback.

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, if a pupil goes to a remote place

for studying

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, he or she should pay for accommodation, utilities, and food.

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, in Azerbaijan, it is common for foreign students to work in part-time jobs to meet their expenditures

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at university; so I believe that financial challenges can be overcome by them and it is not the major issue that prevents studying at a university located far away from their homes. Many students gain new experiences when they go to a distinct country

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their education.

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, studying in a culturally diverse state brings you a new language, lifestyle, and outlook;

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, students learn new things that they have never encountered in their motherlands.

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, some undergraduates go to South Korea from Azerbaijan

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, and they are most impressed by the country's Internet speed and its extraordinary robotic devices;

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, they make progress by learning these new things.

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, I think that the benefits of pursuing education in a remote place far outweigh the drawbacks. In conclusion, travelling to a distant place to study might be financially challenging for those who have just left their homes;

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, the advantages of being developed exceed that drawback.

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The prompt is adequately addressed, and the writer presents clear and comprehensive ideas. Relevant examples are used to support the points made.

coherence and cohesion

The essay has a logical structure, but the introduction and conclusion could be more clearly presented. The ideas are supported and connected well throughout the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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cultural sensitivity
personal growth
adaptability
independence
self-reliance
specialized programs
networking
career opportunities
homesickness
cultural shock
financial strain
accommodation
cost of living
family relationships
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Many students choose to study at colleges and universities that are far away from the places where they grew up. Do the benefits of this outweigh the drawbacks?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved.

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

Some people think that businesses should provide sports facilities for employees. Others consider that a person’s health is their own responsibility, not a company’s problem. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe online materials should only be used for children to learn to read. while other believe only printed reading materials should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

In some cities public parks and open spaces are being changed into gardens where the local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantage?