The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane
The diagram depicts a method through which
sugar
is manufactured by sugar
cane
.
Overall
, the process consists of 7 steps starting from growing the sugarcane and ending up with drawing and cooling of sugars. As can be seen from the chart, First of all, the sugarcane grew in fields for 12 to 18 months, when sugar
cane
got ready for harvesting ,then
it was cut down by hand and by machine. After that, the harvested sugar
cane
was transferred to a crushing machine where the machine extracted juice
from the sugar
cane
. Subsequently
, the juice
proceeds from purifying juice
to Evaporator through a limestone filter
Moreover
, in step 5 , In the Evaporator the juice
becomes syrup by heating the evaporator. Following that, the syrup is delivered in a centrifuge, where, it separates sugar
crystals from the syrup. Finally
, sugar
is produced and placed in a pot for drawing and coolingSubmitted by kiranyahoo04 on
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