Some people think that individuals who make a lot of money are most successful. Other think that those who contribute to society like teachers and scientists are most successful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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I understand the point of view of those who hold the opinion that individuals with vast amounts of wealth are most successful, I am of the opinion that individuals who venture into professions
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as teaching and sciences are more successful, and in
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,essay I will explain my position.
Teachers
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,
scientists
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and similar professions are the backbone of all industries and the creation of wealth. Generally speaking,
knowledge
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and
skills
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are required to amass a lot of wealth, and
teachers
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and
scientists
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are the primary channels for developing them.
Teachers
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help kindle and develop
knowledge
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and
skills
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in their students.
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is a very vital role in ensuring the prosperity and continuity of any society. Every society needs financiers to fund the propagation of
knowledge
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and
skills
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. From what was discussed about the importance of
teachers
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and
scientists
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above, the importance of
teachers
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and propagators of
knowledge
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and
skills
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is very clear. It is important to
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acknowledge the fact that without individuals with a vast amount of money, it is very difficult to fund acquiring
knowledge
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and
skills
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. take
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the late Andrew Canagie who spent the first half of his life acquiring money and the second half of his life giving it all away towards building libraries and setting up grants for free education. Every individual contributor in society is very important, but some are just more vital than others and can generally be considered more successful, and in the case of
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essay
teachers
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and
scientists
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are most successful.
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