The table and chart show data from a survey of library users.

The table and chart show data from a survey of library users.
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The given table gives some information about three different
age
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group
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groups
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of
library
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users who are surveyed about using the
library
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, getting help from librarians
as well as
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thinking about the
importance
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of libraries in 2012.
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as it can be ostensibly seen, a great portion of
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users are at the
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of 16-17 and
also
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they get the most help from librarians;
however
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, 25-29-years old individuals are aware of the
importance
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of libraries and think about that. The first
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group
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ranging from 15 to 16 years old represents 72% of their
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as
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library
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users,
while
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the other two
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groups have fewer interactions with the
library
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with almost 50% of the whole. The same
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group
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has the most rate of asking for help from librarians with 43% and data shows a great reduction in
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rate by ageing from 27% in the second older
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to 19% in the
last
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one. Statistics show that more than 50% of all
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groups are thinking about the
importance
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of libraries but the older they get the greater
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they consider.
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rates of
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factor through these
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groups are 54%, 63% and 74 % respectively.
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