The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a booksellere between 1972 and 2012

The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a booksellere between 1972 and 2012
The given pie graphs represent the proportion of five book genres' market shares in a supplier from 1972 to 2012.
Overall
, adult
fiction
became the most significant area sold by a bookstore by far over time, children's
fiction
also
increased its size whilst all other categories lost market share. The three biggest
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reading categories were adult
fiction
, children's
fiction
and biography, with 20% for each in 1972.
However
,
whilest
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while
adult
fiction
and children's
fiction
rose their total revenues to 45% and 25%, respectively, biography saw a notable decrease
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5% in 1992,and 7% in 2012 to 8% in 2012.
Therefore
, the proportion of biography sales hit the bottom and placed the
last
rank. Travel and other categories that
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mentioned were the remaining two competitors which had 40% of the total sales in 1972. Travel books share dropped by 5% to 10% in 2012,
although
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increased by 3% in 1992. The others more than
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half of incomes
lost
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and dropped to %12 in 2012.
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