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Many people today would argue that cinemas are becoming irrelevant due to new streaming services. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, whether
people
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 tend to watch
movies
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 through new
straming
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streaming
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 and not to visit
cinemas
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 has been in the spotlight of public attention. With regard to
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 matter, I am of the opinion that
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theatres
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 are becoming irrelevant because of new streaming apps
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these days. In the following essay, the reasons for my argument will be elaborated. First of all, one of the reasons is
people
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 can watch
movies
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 anytime through new
straming
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streaming
services
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. It is a well-known fact that
people
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 will feel
unconvinent
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inconvenient
 since most
cinemas
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 that each movie
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starts
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.
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,
according to
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 research, the main reason that
people
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 do not visit
cinemas
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 is a number of
people
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 cannot work around
cinemas
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’
schedule
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schedules
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. Even though
,
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 there are a host of choices which are planned at
cinemas
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,
people
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 tend to watch
movies
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 on Netflix
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that which
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which
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they
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 can watch anytime.
Therefore
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, it is evident that
people
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 do not need to go
theather
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theatre
 to watch
movies
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 since they have
another
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another service
other services
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services
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 that they want to watch anytime. Another reason for my argument is that there are various genres of
movies
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 in new streaming
services
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,
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people
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and people
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 can choose
genres
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the genres
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 of
moives
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movies
 which they want. In
cinemas
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,
people
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 can watch only new
movies
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 because the
cinemas
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 are limited to space.
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,
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streaming apps have a number of
movies
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 and
people
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 can choose
movies
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 widely to enjoy.
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, when I visited the cinema with my mother, we could not watch the movie because there were the genres of
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 that we do not prefer.
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, we came back home and watched
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 on Netflix, which are
exitsted
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exited
 a host of contents. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, it is indisputable that there are a variety of opinions concerning
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 matter. After careful consideration with that in mind, it can be concluded that
cinemas
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 have become
irrelveant
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irrelevant
 because of advanced streaming
services
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due to
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 the reasons above.
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