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People produce more carbon emissions and garbage than in the past. Explain how it is affecting us and the measures that could be taken to address the situation. Provide specific examples and explanation to support your answer

humans activities are the main factor in increasing the rate of
carbon
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emissions
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 and producing more garbage. In fact, overpopulation plays a critical role
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in making
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 problem more complicated. There are several harmful sequences of
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 on the plants
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 on the flora and fauna. In the following, I will deliberate more about the harmful sequences of increasing
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emissions
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as well as
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 how we address
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 difficult situation.
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, Global warming is one of the serious problems caused by increasing
carbon
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emissions
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.
Emissions
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 more of
green-houses
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greenhouse
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 gases
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 as
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 and methane gasses would prevent the sun from reflecting the heat into space. Global warmings cause many environmental issues
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 as rising sea
level
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levels
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 an increase in the rate of extension of more species. For instance,rising sea levels would produce flooding and
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 damage the cities near the sea.
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, increasing the temperature would make the ice sheet melt and
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 the animals that depend on the cold environment would be extinct. To solve
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 hard situation,there are plenty of steps that should be considered. Government should apply strict policies to cut out the
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 footprint
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 as enforcing taxes for the emission of
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.
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, the government should
enforce
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 people to use a friendly environmental transportation system. Fossil fuel cars produce a high rate of
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 fingerprint because people mainly rely on private fossil fuel cars rather than using the public transportation system or
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electric cars .
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,
carbon
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emissions
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 affect many aspects of our
life
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lives
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 and we should put massive efforts
to cut
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into cutting
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 the
emissions
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 of
carbon
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 footprint.

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Your conclusion summarizes the main points, but it could be more specific about the measures mentioned.
coherence cohesion
You might want to use clearer transition words to connect your ideas better.
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Try to develop your examples a bit more for clarity and depth.
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You mentioned important points about global warming and carbon emissions, showing a good understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction outlines what will be discussed, which gives a clear direction for the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Climate change
  • Non-biodegradable
  • Ecosystems
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Sustainable practices
  • Recycling
  • Environmental pollution
  • Biodiversity
  • Air quality
  • Respiratory diseases
  • Carbon footprint
  • Environmental justice
  • Public awareness
  • Eco-friendly
  • Global cooperation
  • Regulations
  • Single-use plastics
  • Waste management
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