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‏Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. ‏To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many people say the best way for recognized by the new public in various cultures and the same age is through
music
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, l personally agree with the choice because
music
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 assists us to know other
countries
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 through singers and gives us the opportunity to make friendships or find a fit partner.
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,
music
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 helps us to know different several
countries
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 we haven’t heard it and visited these
countries
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 and watched the customs and traditions,
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 will the
countries
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 on a big development economically and commercially and
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 raise the level of tourism and companies to Export food like noodles, for , the example we see band BTS in Korea they help enormously their country and they’re all stages like increasing sales , become Korea the most counter visited around the world though few years.
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, there are several fun on make friendships and found partners by common sharing like news singers or albums on pages or YouTube at parties for longer hours surely
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 will create curious to recognize people who have the same styles
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 there are many fun doing Donations for cases bad for people ,
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 ,a recent study found major the donations the comes of fun singer for victims like a tsunami and an earthquake like doing Turkish famous. In conclusion,
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 ,we can’t deny it is a lot of singers doing many for their
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 , or have the country in development in all stages. I believe that
music
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 is essential not only for these things but
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 it assists us in spending time relaxing our nerves. become Korea the most counter visited around the world though few years.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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