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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people’s reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes believed that using
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technologies
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 effect on people’s reading and writing skills.
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 with
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 from other countries, which youngsters can not find in a library or a store.
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, students in a university use the computer frequently to find
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information related to their major, from that, they can read and use it to write their
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, using technology allows youngsters to
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 that, their reading and writing skill will be improved. Another point behind my belief is that online courses
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 computers. To be more precise, there are online courses which
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 students to improve their reading and writing skill very well. The course mainly
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 on the weakness of their skills,
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 a study plan to help them better. In conclusion, I totally disagree that
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 growth of using technologies
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 disadvantageous effects on
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 generation’s reading and writing skills given the aforementioned arguments
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