Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you thing this is a positive or a negative development?

These days, there are increasing number of
people
with
health
issues
are
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who are
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trying to
cure
their
illness
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illnesses
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with
alternative
treatment
and medicine rather than visiting
health
facilities. I believe that
this
is a negative development and
this
essay will attempt to elaborate
a
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on a
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couple of fundamental reasons why an
alternative
treatment
leads to
drawback
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a drawback
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impact on
people
's
health
.
To begin
with, the first reason why
alternative
medicines are negative is that they are not based on scientific evidence. They do not go through lab trials,
while
medical
treatment
has already passed the series of trial and error
process
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processes
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.
Alternative
curing is only based on cultural
believe
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beliefs
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from the previous societies in
an
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apply
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ancient
time
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times
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.
Thus
, it may lead to negative
effect
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effects
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for
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on
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people
's
body
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bodies
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.
For instance
, China's medicine
which
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apply
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will
cure
cancer but until now it
is
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has
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not
proof
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been proven
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. The second reason is
one
of the
alternative
treatment
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treatments
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used for several diseases.
This
way usually only
cure
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cures
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the basic symptoms not the root of the
health
problem
causes
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apply
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.
For example
, acupuncture is
one
of the
treatment
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treatments
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from China
in
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apply
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which
people
believing
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believe
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can
cure
several serious illnesses
such
as diabetes, high blood pressure, and
health
problem
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problems
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. Meanwhile, those diseases will be treated differently in medical
treatment
.
To sum up
, nowadays
alternative
herbs
gain
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popularity
from
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in
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the
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a
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number of societies; I think it leads to drawback developments.
Firstly
,
primary
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reason is that it does not
has
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have
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a
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apply
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scientific proof and
secondly
,
one
medicine can
cure
several illnesses
where
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whereas
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in medical
treatment
one
health
issues
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issue
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may
has
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have
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different
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a different
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treatment
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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