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Band 3.5

the population of Internet users and average of spending in online shopping

The diagrams depict how many
internet
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 users are in five different countries (Spain, France,
Sweden
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, Germany, and the
UK
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) and how much money-consuming online shopping
(euro
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 per person on average). Generally, it is obvious that
Sweden
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 has the biggest population depending on the
internet
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as well as
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 it is the second most consumable country in spending penny buying stuff right after the United Kingdom, taking place at the top. The first graph shows that the residents in
Sweden
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 are the most active
internet
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 users since it is the only country achieving 35% of the population.
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, Germany and the
UK
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 are contributing around 15%-20%
while
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 the percentage of France and Spain residents is only 5% and 10% respectively, the two lowest countries using the
internet
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. The pie diagram illustrates that the highest spending on shopping online (in euro) is people living in the
UK
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 compared to other counties on the list at just under 90 euro per person, followed by
Sweden
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 which is reaching almost 80%.
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, people in France and Germany are taking third and fourth place around 50 – 60 %. The
UK
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 is the only less consumptive country compared to other countries at 10%.

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