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Some people say that advertisings extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other peopte think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #advertisings #peopte #attention
Many
people
 believe
advertisements
it’s
 not important for purchasing something,
although
it’s
 an
advertisement
 stage fundamentally of stages for a creative product ,l agree with
this
 opinion because the
advertisement
 introduces the product.
On the other hand
,
people
 think the
advertisement
 becomes popular among
people
 and there is a lot of the public do not trust
advertisements
 because appear
products
 in the best photo and
then
 they are shocked
it’s
 bad,the better way to help companies by increasing sales and promotions of their product
it’s
 reduced cost ,for ,example recent study found
products
 to be that low prices without
advertisement
 more than
products
 have many advancements .
On the other hand
 ,
people
 believe to view the
advertisement
 used until introduce to us Things maybe we need in our daily life or easy work without
this
 is way how we will recognize on production? Companies used several Methods to promote their things , famous celebrities have a lot of followers who in turn them to create situations or stories that affect curious
people
 , I agree with
this
 point, but I think companies should develop their ideas for showing their
products
for example
 , today we see on the YouTube a lot of celebrities talking about
products
 shein like makeup or clothes or shoes or accessories without them we can’t introduce on
this
products
 In conclusion,as result a,there are many
people
 become see
advertisements
 all the way to introduce
products
 to the company, and some
people
 say, do essential
advertisements
 for we see features that things I think we can’t head
products
 without
advertisement
 with importance Knowing what the consumer wants.
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