The bar chart show the number of visitors to three Londan Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart show the number of visitors to three Londan Museums between 2007 and 2012. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph illustrates the
visitor
numbers of three
museum
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museums
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in London from 2007 and 2012.
Overall
, National
Gallery
and
British
Museum
generally followed an upward trend,
however
, Victoria and Albert
Museum
lost its popularity five years later. The two museums in
Londan
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London
that increased their
visitor
figures over time: National
Gallery
,
British
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and British
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Museum
, with
rougly
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roughly
6, and 12
million
visitors
per year. Both museums followed an upward trend over time,
although
British
museum
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museums
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saw a notable decrease of 6
million
in 2008. In 2010,
British
Museum
replaced Victoria and Albert
Museum
as the highest annual
visitors
by far with over 10
million
visitors
.
Then
both
British
Museum
and National
Gallery
competed
each
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with each
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other for the first rank over a two years period. In 2012, National
Gallery
's
visitor
number inclined to over 15
million
which was slightly higher than
British
Museum
. Between 2007 and 2008, Victoria and Albert
Museum
was the most dominant place among its other counterparts for annual
visitor
counts.
In contrast
, its popularity lost over time and its
visitors
only reached 10
million
per year in 2012 which was the
last
interested
gallery
besides
others.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitor, museum, gallery, british, million, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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