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The bar chart show the number of visitors to three Londan Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart show the number of visitors to three Londan Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph illustrates the
visitor
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 numbers of three
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museum
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 in London from 2007 and 2012.
Overall
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, National
Gallery
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 and
British
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Museum
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 generally followed an upward trend,
however
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, Victoria and Albert
Museum
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 lost its popularity five years later. The two museums in
Londan
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London
 that increased their
visitor
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 figures over time: National
Gallery
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,
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British
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and British
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Museum
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, with
rougly
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roughly
 6, and 12
million
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visitors
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 per year. Both museums followed an upward trend over time,
although
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museum
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museums
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 saw a notable decrease of 6
million
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 in 2008. In 2010,
British
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Museum
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 replaced Victoria and Albert
Museum
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 as the highest annual
visitors
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 by far with over 10
million
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visitors
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.
Then
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 both
British
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Museum
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 and National
Gallery
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 competed
each
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 other for the first rank over a two years period. In 2012, National
Gallery
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's
visitor
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 number inclined to over 15
million
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 which was slightly higher than
British
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Museum
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. Between 2007 and 2008, Victoria and Albert
Museum
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 was the most dominant place among its other counterparts for annual
visitor
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 counts.
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, its popularity lost over time and its
visitors
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 only reached 10
million
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 per year in 2012 which was the
last
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 interested
gallery
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besides
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 others.
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