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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
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 bar chart shows
house
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 payment differentiation around the world in the late 1990s. Five cities from developed countries,
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 on different continents, are selected for
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 comparison; New York from North America, Tokyo from Asia, and Madrid, Frankfurt, and London from Europe. The capital of the United Kingdom, London, showed the highest differentiation in
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 group because, in
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 five years of 1990 decades,
house
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 prices were 10% lower than in 1989
’s
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 price. Still, there was a significant increase in 1996-2002 by up to 10% higher than the 1989
’s
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 price.
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, London had the highest property inflation in
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 group by had 20% differentiation.
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,
other city
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another city
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 in developed countries had the same trend because these cities had average
house
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 prices in 1990-1995 lower than the 1989
’s
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 prices but
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 payment in the next era had 5% approximately increasing from 1989
’s
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 rates.
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 many cities in
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 group had a high inflation rate in property, the second largest city in Germany, Frankfurt, was the only city which showed decreasing in
house
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 rate by slightly dropped from 2 or 3% in 1990-1995 to 1% in 1996-2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words house, ’s with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • housing market
  • average house prices
  • trend analysis
  • price fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • year-on-year change
  • appreciation and depreciation of property value
  • benchmark year (1989)
  • significant increase/decrease
  • inflation-adjusted prices
  • real estate dynamics
  • economic factors
  • buyer's/seller's market
  • price index
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