Some people believe using modern technology (digital photographs, blogs) is the best way to record and remember important personal events. Others think the traditional method (making photo albums, writing diaries) is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are two different opinions related to how the best method
recording
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individual events. Some
people
think that utilizing the advancement of
technology
such
as google photos and blog is better to record special moments,
while
others believe that
conventional
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way is the best.
This
essay will attempt to elaborate both views and I
personal
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believe
technology
is
the
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better remembering that
people
can review and recall the
moment
anywhere and everywhere in
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a convenience
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convenience
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way. On the one hand,
people
used to recording personal moments utilize traditional tools
such
as
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storing
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in photo albums and writing diaries. The reason is
more
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meaningful way where
people
can decorate and create
itself
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themselves
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.
For instance
, individuals who held wedding
cermonies
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ceremonies
and
then
store
the photos and
video
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videos
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in the album
their
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prepared by
themsleves
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themselves
will be
remembering
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in
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the
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longer time rather than just
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into
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ways.
On the other hand
, modern
technology
is a timeless tool
which
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people
can save
the
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certain
moment
in there and recall the
moment
anytime remembering
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memory is limited. It is a fact that human
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oftenly
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often
forgeting
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forgetting
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, but
technology
will
store
the
moment
timelessly. The purpose of recording and writing individual
moment
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is to be recalled anytime when
people
need it, so
technology
can achieve
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purpose. Another reason is more convenient, everyone
do
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not have to bring photos album, DVD recording, and diaries when the special event happened.
People
just bring one tool to do the jobs (recording
moment
).
For instance
, individuals
are
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just type in
the
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tumblr
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to write their agenda using their smartphone rather than
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a physical diary, it is more convenient and easy to use.
To sum up
, traditional and modern
technology
are the ways that
people
can
store
their
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meaningful
moment
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moments
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in their life, both
of
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ways having
positive
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a positive
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impact
for
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each
individuals
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. I personally believe that in
modern
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era we have to
maximizing
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technology
in every
moment
and
technology
is the best tool to save the precious
moment
where it is convenient and timeless.
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