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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory jib or shortage of money.Others argue that it is better to try and imprive such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is a debatable issue among
people
 who argue whether accepting the least favourable conditions and situations during their lifetime is normal.
While
 some
people
 do not have any choice except to get used to bad situations,I believe that all of those issues must be dealt with somehow.
Firstly
,some reasons justify
people
's notion regarding not improving the situations in their lives.First and foremost,most of the
people
 are afraid to solve something for their welfare.Most of them are terrified by the consequences that may happen and about what others will say about them.
For example
,
while
 having a problem with a low salary
that is
 given to these
people
,
instead
 of asking for a reasonable promotion,they take off their hands from trying to do something.
In addition
 to
this
,most of them are brought up from their childhood to be like everyone and to agree with everything in their lives.
That is
 why
people
commence to be
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 scared when they want to alter something.
However
,I believe that being braver
to solve
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 some problems must be an essential skill for everyone
due to
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 some reasons.
Firstly
.we must understand that getting used to changes in a worse way is the worst characteristic ever.Sometimes those,who are not afraid acquire all the perks everywhere.
Last
 but not least,it is known that life is given only once and being scared of doing something may lead to bad consequences.
For instance
,when
people
 accept something unfavourable to them,without a shadow of a doubt
this
 will grow into something even worse than it used to be. In conclusion,no doubt
people
 accept bad things that are facing them.
However
,
while
 some reasons like being scared make
people
 live with the problem,I assert that it is not always the case to do so.
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