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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Many individuals suggest that there should be no limitation on
data
 contribution in different fields of science, trade and the scientific world.
While
on the other hand
, a group of the population consider it too risky to share any sort of knowledge without considering possible detrimental impacts on societies. In
this
 essay, both ideas will be discussed and, in the end, I will represent my point of view as well.
To begin
 with, there are countless publications and scientific organizations which release freely any sort of
data
 regardless of its value. Many individuals find these
data
 valuable for their progress in business or research.
For example
, the Up-to-Date application which is a medical resource for diseases and treatments, releases unlimited
data
 from the newest scientific discoveries monthly.
As a result
, all of the physicians are able to access
this
 valorous knowledge free of charge globally and give the best possible care to their patients.
Consequently
, providing valuable information leads to a better healthcare system and a safe world.
On the contrary
, there is a disagreement about the free availability of
data
.
Firstly
, there are lots of efforts and financial support to publish a scientific article
for example
. Many argue that it is not fair to release
this
 information freely because
in
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 the long term, it might become not cost-effective to research in high-tech and expensive fields.
Secondly
, there always is a big concern over any abuse of information by some criminals.
For instance
, valuable experiments and techniques in the nuclear plant are considered highly sensitive intelligence which must be protected from terrorist organizations at any cost.
To conclude
, despite some respected concerns over the free accessibility of
data
, in my perspective, the number of positive outcomes from free
data
 sharing like a healthier world definitely outweigh its opponent’s point of view.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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