Currently, there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicines. However, at best these medicines are ineffective and at worst they might be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

These days, substitute forms of medicines are being gained popularity and become widely used by many society members,
whereas
, others claim that these are inefficient and may affect negatively
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human health.
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the alternative treatment is cheaper and may seem
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effective, I believe strongly that it is risky and may have side effects in comparison with the advanced conventional way of treating.
To begin
with, the first viewpoint which is new methods of healing cost less expensive and seem more effective.
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approaches
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manual therapy are more affordable rather than taking pills and surgery.
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amount of blood from
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vein in order to lower his blood pressure and normalize the heart rate. The patient may feel satisfied and the promised results seem to be reached just after the one session which costs around 10-15 dollars.
However
,
according to
my perspective,
this
has only a short-term effect, and after, may lead to infections or diseases like
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.
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the risk of being infected, uncertified specialists who provide the procedure
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the new approach unreliable and doubtful.
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professional doctors and
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of modern bу devices like ultrasound or X-ray
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are the best.
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diabetes, it may be detected by
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in a few minutes,
further
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of disease the pills will be determined,
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a result, the illness will be overcome efficiently.
To sum up
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this
essay argued why I firmly maintain that the trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine is dangerous and should be cut off. It is better to come up
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health problems
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advanced medicine.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • alternative forms of medicines
  • ineffective
  • dangerous
  • extent
  • agree
  • popularity
  • effectiveness
  • potential dangers
  • personal beliefs
  • attitudes
  • scientific research
  • regulation
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