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Some people think that certain old buildings are more worth preserving than the other ones? Do you think that the advantages of preserving these old buildings outweigh the disadvantage

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It is claimed that
people
 think that old
buildings
 are worth preserving more than others .
While
 there are some existing drawbacks , I believe that
this
 decision has more potential benefits. On the one hand , It is recognized that a significant number of negative impacts can be seen . If the old houses are still used in a densely populated place, it can affect
people
's lives .The biggest damage is caused by fire. Because current temperatures are rising and power outages occur frequently, some old houses are short-circuited, leading to fires. Another adverse effect would be that some of the preserved old
buildings
 are now degraded and the cost to protect these old
buildings
 is very high, many of the
buildings
 that are not in the ancient ruins are still not maintained and upgraded repair permits jeopardize the safety and beauty of the city.
On the other hand
 , I would agree that there are more advantageous impacts on societies.
Firstly
, a number of historic
buildings
 were protected and renovated to become a place of learning and sightseeing for students and visitors.
For example
, Thanh Co Loa is one of the important historical sites of Vietnam that has been restored to become a famous relic for tourists.
Second,
there is an old building located in the old town
that is
 currently being used and known worldwide as a famous tourist and check-in destination.
That is
 creating many job opportunities and boosts income for
people
. In conclusion, the
buildings
 are too old, so they should be renovated to avoid endangering
people
 around . There are more likely to have significant positive effects than negative ones
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