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Some feel that movies and tv shows are a good way to study history despite their lack of historical accuracy at times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is an argument that studying
history
 through the media has a benefit
while
 some
people
 believe that it is sometimes inaccurate. Even though there is a lack of accuracy I believe that it has a positive effect. On the one hand, it is true that there is some problem with learning
history
 from TV
programmes
 or movies. First and foremost, a huge amount of shows and films are released every year, making it impossible to check every fact.
Secondly
, some media producers just want to earn money from the audiences as they don’t care if it is based on fact or not.
For example
, if they can not make those things stimulating,
people
 may not watch them.
On the other hand
,
although
 sometimes it may not be correct, I believe that it is still a useful method to learn
our
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about our
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 past. One of the main reasons can be that nowadays a lot of
people
 may not find interest in the past so attractive TV
programmes
 and historical films make
history
 more accessible and engaging to a wide audience. They help encourage
people
 who might not typically engage with
history
 to explore and learn more. Another reason is that despite the creative fact, many
programmes
 aim to capture the essence of a particular time period
of
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or
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 historical setting as the audience still obtains useful information about the past from entertaining
programmes
. In conclusion,
while
 it is acknowledged that studying
history
 through the media can sometimes be incorrect, it still holds several benefits.
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