Many people believe that music is just a form of entertainment, whilst others believe that music has a much larger impact on society today. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
The topic of
music
has been controversial. Some people
believe that music
is just a form of entertainment
, whereas
I agree with those who think that music
has a much larger impact
on society today.
On the one hand, it is commonly believed that music
is just a form of entertainment
. The most important reason is that listening to music
helps them to relax. For example
, according to
the latest study conducted by Bangkok University, it was revealed that listeners who listen to acoustic music
can be released Endorphin and Adrenalin hormones from the brain. It is highly likely that the mind and body feel calm and happy. This
example shows that music
plays a major role in the entertainment
of the mind and body.
On the other hand
, it seems to me that music
has a much larger impact
on society today. The most significant reason is the fact that music
has an effect on people
's appreciation. To illustrate this
, in recent news, it has been reported that K-pop music
in Korea is more famous in the world. There is a possibility that people
admire and fall in love with the artist, for example
, children like to sing and dance Korean songs. I agree with this
point because K-pop music
has a lot of impact
on people
around the world. Especially, Lisa is more famous.
In conclusion, having considered both sides of this
topic, although
music
is just a form of entertainment
, I agree with those who think that music
has a much larger impact
on society today. I strongly support that music
has an effect on people
's appreciation.Submitted by ssirirat on
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