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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table represents the trends of
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
people
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 who went
for
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on
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 international
travel
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 from 1990 to 2000. The destinations of
travel
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 include Africa, America, Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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, Europe, and the Middle East.
According to
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table
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total
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number
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 of
people
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 who enjoyed international
travel
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 have increased from 1990 to 2000. In 1990 a total of 448.9
million
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people
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have
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travelled abroad
in
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 which a majority of 280.2
million
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people
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went
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 to Europe
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, the least
number
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 of
people
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 which is 9.8
million
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people
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 visited the Middle East. The numbers have increased to a total of 615.2
million
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 who travelled internation by 1995 with Europe leading with 390.3
million
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 and the
number
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 of Middle East travellers have increased by 1.5
million
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. By 2000,
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number
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the number
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 of
people
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 who travelled to Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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has
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 increased drastically by 37.1
million
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 from 80.3
million
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 in 1995 to 117.4
million
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 in 2000 compared to other destinations. In 2005 the total
number
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 of
people
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 who travelled
international
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internationally
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have
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increased
upto
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up to
 693.7
million
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. Even though,
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number
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the number
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 of
people
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 who went to America
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decreased from 118.2
million
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 in 2000 to 113.2
million
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 in 2005.
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, it can be said that
number
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 of
people
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 who enjoy international
travel
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 has increased over 15 years.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, travel, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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