when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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elderly
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homes
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number has increased drastically in the
last
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decades.It is stated
by
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some people that the government should fund these buildings ,
whereas
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others
empahasize
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that individuals should pay for
this
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assesstaince
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assistance

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. I firmly opine that both parts should be included. to commence with, authorities have to build the required infrastructure for any community.
That is
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to say, schools, railways,hospitals and
care
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homes
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as well
sholud
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should

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all be established by the control power. It is the
responsibilty
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responsibility

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of the government to set up old age houses
beacuse
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because

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they are considered
as
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places where the elderly could
recieve
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receive

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urgent treatment. So, it should be supplied with the
lattest
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latest

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equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment

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to provide intensive acute
care
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as well as
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vital signs
managment
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management

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.
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, the elderly
care
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homes
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should have adequate
heath
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health

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machines for bedridden people or folks who suffer from chronic ailments. These
prerequesties
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prerequisites

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are exorbitant and
individuls
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individuals

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can not afford the high cost of the expenditure.
Thus
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, establishing retirement
plats
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plans

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should be in the governers' charge.
On the other hand
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, Families should
participatre
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participate

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in funding the fitness
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for their parents
beacuse
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because

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these
homes
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take a preponderant burden of their responsibilities.
In other words
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, if these
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are not existed
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do not exist
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,
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the family

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family
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families

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will carry a heavy
sociall
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social

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and monetary duty to look after senior people.
For instance
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, allocating a sum of money
for
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these associations in order to give wages to
the
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well trained
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nurses cost
is
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less than taking
care
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of them at home.
Therefore
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, paying a tax ,sharing some expenses or even
consider
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considering

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it as a paid service would be definitely a reasonable
soultion
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.
Otherwise
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, leaving parents out of love,concern and
care
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is
absoluetly
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absolutely

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not ethical.
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,nations can help
in
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this
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issue by raising awareness about the importance of these houses
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opening the door to charitable shares. In a nutshell, both authorities and community members should cooperate to give a
high quality
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life standard to those who gave us not only birth
,
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but
also
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their time ,money and
unconditionl
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unconditional

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love .From my perspective,participating
of
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in

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both
parts
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parties

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in creating
semi-hospiltal
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semi-hospital

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is
essentail
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essential

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action to hoist ancestors' complacency and
ourselves
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pride as well.

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