when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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elderly

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number of elderly

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care

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homes

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number has increased drastically in the

last

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decades.It is stated

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apply

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some people that the government should fund these buildings ,

whereas

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others

empahasize

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emphasise

that individuals should pay for

this

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assesstaince

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assistance

. I firmly opine that both parts should be included. to commence with, authorities have to build the required infrastructure for any community.

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to say, schools, railways,hospitals and

care

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homes

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as well

sholud

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should

all be established by the control power. It is the

responsibilty

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responsibility

of the government to set up old age houses

beacuse

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because

they are considered

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apply

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places where the elderly could

recieve

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receive

urgent treatment. So, it should be supplied with the

lattest

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latest

equipments

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equipment

types of equipment

pieces of equipment

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to provide intensive acute

care

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as well as

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vital signs

managment

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management

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, the elderly

care

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homes

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should have adequate

heath

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health

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machines for bedridden people or folks who suffer from chronic ailments. These

prerequesties

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prerequisites

are exorbitant and

individuls

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individuals

can not afford the high cost of the expenditure.

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, establishing retirement

plats

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plans

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should be in the governers' charge.

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, Families should

participatre

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participate

in funding the fitness

homes

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for their parents

beacuse

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because

these

homes

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take a preponderant burden of their responsibilities.

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, if these

homes

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are not existed

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do not exist

have not existed

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the family

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family

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families

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will carry a heavy

sociall

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social

and monetary duty to look after senior people.

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, allocating a sum of money

for

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these associations in order to give wages to

the

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apply

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well trained

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well-trained

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nurses cost

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apply

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less than taking

care

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of them at home.

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, paying a tax ,sharing some expenses or even

consider

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considering

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it as a paid service would be definitely a reasonable

soultion

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solution

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, leaving parents out of love,concern and

care

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absoluetly

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absolutely

not ethical.

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,nations can help

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with

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this

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issue by raising awareness about the importance of these houses

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and

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opening the door to charitable shares. In a nutshell, both authorities and community members should cooperate to give a

high quality

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high-quality

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life standard to those who gave us not only birth

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but

also

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their time ,money and

unconditionl

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unconditional

love .From my perspective,participating

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both

parts

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parties

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in creating

semi-hospiltal

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semi-hospital

homes

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essentail

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essential

action to hoist ancestors' complacency and

ourselves

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apply

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pride as well.

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