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Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world today. In some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy is replacing fossil fuels. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Fossil
fuels
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 are the primary source of
energy
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 in the planet and some countries are finding
alternative
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sources
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 of
energy
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 as a replacement for fossil
fuels
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.
This
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 action definitely imparts a positive development in our society and in our planet as a whole.
This
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 essay will discuss what are some good implications of venturing into other
power
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sources
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.
Firstly
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, fossil
fuels
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 are naturally available in our
environment
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 ,
however
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,
this
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energy
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 source will be depleted in a year's time.
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, countries are turning into possible
energy
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sources
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. Wind and water are some of the
alternative
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sources
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 that can generate
energy
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 and in fact, both are abundant in our
environment
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. These
sources
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 are oftentimes called
alternative
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 "green
power
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" that are basically environmentally friendly.
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, green
power
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sources
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 help the
environment
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 by reducing the damaging greenhouse effect produces as a by-product of using fossil
fuels
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. Geothermal plants and wind turbines are examples of
power
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-generating solutions that are primarily not dependent on fossil
fuels
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. In the Philippines
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, several provinces are now generating and using electricity from wind farms and reducing the dependency on fossil
fuels
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.
Secondly
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 ,
however
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, going into these
alternative
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 green
power
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 may not be cost-effective as designing and building new plants are deemed to be expensive.
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, it may not be
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 feasible in some locations to build certain types of green
power
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sources
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. But these negative implications can be compensated by the long-term use of
alternative
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energy
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. On a final note, venturing into
alternative
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sources
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 of
energy
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 in lieu of fossil
fuels
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 may be expensive but it generally outweighs the positive development that gives a good impact on our
environment
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.
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