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At the present time, he population of some counries includes a relaively large number of young aduls, co￿pared ￿ the number of o￿ people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

At the present time, he population of some counries includes a relaively large number of young aduls, co￿pared ￿ the number of o￿ people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
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There is no doubt that these days we have a huge growth of younger in our population. The question is, are
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 negative? in
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aged
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, people population lead to an
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 worker
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. The main reason given to support
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 claim is that services and the amount of requirement of many things because every kind of work need an amount of employee. To illustrate, if the
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 of males in the school grows we will add more chairs for them, and because of ,that we must employ more teachers. In other words, if there is an
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 in the younger they will be growth in the
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 of jobs.
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, there were many disadvantages of these phenomena. first of all, we will notice a sharp
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 in the population to more than double because all the younger will get married in the future.
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, the government have to be ready to build houses and create a new infrastructure
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 the cities, or perhaps they should create a new city from the zero.
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, they will count the
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 of pregnant women and make a plan for hospitals and other buildings. In
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conclusion, we can see that having more younger will lead to creating more jobs, but the country should be ready for that in all the details.
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, I believe that if there was an
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 in the Younger people
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 that’s much better than the opposite.
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