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Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree.

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It is argued that
newspaper
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 is still considered one of the prominent
news
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 sources despite the increase in demand for reading
news
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 online.
This
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 essay totally disagrees with that statement. I believe that
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newspaper
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 will no longer
view
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 as
an important
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an important news source
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news
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 sources as they are outdated and readers are opting for an
environmentally-friendly
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option
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. The
news
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 in the
newspapers
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are
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 considered outdated when compared to reading articles online.
News
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 publishing is a very complex process, as it is time-consuming
such
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 as finalising the
news
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 by editors, publishing and printing
newspapers
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, sorting the pages and delivering the press. By the time the
news
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 is printed in the
newspaper
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, the
news
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 is considered outdated,
this
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 information is one day old.
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, my grandfather used to work in a publishing company, he told me that to publish a
newspaper
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, he
need
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 to spend lots of time getting the
news
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 approved by the chief editors, and he
has
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 to allow extra production time, as
newspapers
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 are printed in bulk, and he needs to sorts out the page number to ensure accuracy of the press.
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, many people are increasingly concerned about the
environment
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 and they are opting for environmentally-friendly alternatives.
To begin
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 with, publishing a press requires a vast amount of
papers
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paper
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 and ink which is very harmful to the
environment
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. The production of
newspapers
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 can pollute the air, water and soil as the inks are made out of toxic materials to be
realised
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released
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 into the
environment
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.
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, a study from the University of London reported that
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newspapers
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 waste accounts for one-third of the paper waste, and they encourage readers to use greener alternatives to mitigate
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 problem. In conclusion, for a high percentage of the population,
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is not an essential source of
news
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 anymore because they cannot provide
news
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 in a timely manner and impact the
environment
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 negatively.

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task response
Inadequate development of main ideas and examples
coherence and cohesion
Lack of clear and comprehensive organization and linkage of information
lexical resource
Limited range of vocabulary and inaccurate word choice
grammatical range
Incorrect and inconsistent use of grammar structures

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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