The pie charts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000.
The 2 documents,
shows
Correct subject-verb agreement
show
firstly
fishing information like the total value in billion dollars and secondly
the imported fish between 1988 and 2000 in US
. Correct article usage
the US
Then
, there are
Change the verb form
is
also
information about other countries like China
or Canada
because they are the countries that import the most goods to the United States.
First and foremost, it is clear that
the total value has increase
from 1988 to 2000 Change the verb form
increased
furthermore
, if we focus on importation, the highest importer in 1988 is Canada
, then
in 1992 and 2000 other countries than Canada
or China
.
If we make a more explicit analysis of the first document, in 1988 the Value reached 6,57 Billion Dollars, in 1993, 8,52 and finally
in 2000 the highest level with 10.72.
On
the following document, in 1988, Change preposition
In
Canada
entailed 60% source of fish
imported followed by “others” and Correct article usage
the fish
lastly
China
with 13%. After, 4 years later the order is changing and is this
one, “others” with 46%, Canada
, 34% and China
20%. And last
but not least, in 2000 the order is
the same per inverting Asians for Wrong verb form
was
Canada
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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