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THE MAPS ILLUSTRATE HOW ONE SEASIDE HOLIDAY RESORT CHANGED BETWEEN 1940 AND 1990.

THE MAPS ILLUSTRATE HOW ONE SEASIDE HOLIDAY RESORT CHANGED BETWEEN 1940 AND 1990.
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The diagrams illustrate how one seaside
beach
 holiday resort has changed since it was built in 1950.
Overall
 , the almost empty
beach
 , except
woodland
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 and
beach
huts
was
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were
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 turned into a city on the
beach
consistes
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consisting
 of
hotel
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the hotel
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, surf school and gardens in later years.
According to
 the picture, in 1950, there were sand dunes around
of
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the
beach
huts
 and a woodland to the right of the
beach
huts
 in that area. There was
also
track
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a track
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, which goes to the centre of
beach
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the beach
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, behind the woodland. Looking at the map for 1970, it can be seen that the
huts
 of
beach
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the beach
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 were reconstructed as villas. Another noticeable change is that the woodland with the trees cut down was converted into a caravan park. By 1990 , sand dunes were changed
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to
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attractive landscaped gardens which give beauty
for
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city
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the city
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.
Additionally
 , villas were transformed
to
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into
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a
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apply
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big
hotel
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hotels
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 to increase the
amount
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 of visitors.
Also
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,Also
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 caravan park was turned into
car
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the car
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 park.
Another
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differences
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difference
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 were
built
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the built
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 surf schools and
new
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a new
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 pool in the
midle
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middle
 of
resort
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the resort
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 which
were
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was
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usefull
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useful
 for
visitors's
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visitors'
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 babies.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beach, huts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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