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More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items with famous brands. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Many
people
 would like to buy clothes,automobiles other
things
with
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from
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 popular brands. It is
positive
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a positive
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 idea because
people
 want to try
good
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a good
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live
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life
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 but it has negative sides. Nowadays, Most
people
 want to be modern clothes , modern cars and other modern
things
 because they feel that
this items
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this item
these items
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 help for
good
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a good
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live
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life
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in
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apply
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this
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these
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 days so they always try
to
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apply
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them. It is
good
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a good
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 idea because every person loves
yourself
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themselves
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,
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for example
, my husband in
this
peson
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person
 he likes modern
things
 so my
famil
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family
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live
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lives
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good
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well
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.
Than
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Then
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this thing
these things
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this
things
 must every person for
good
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the good
a good
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 life in
this
 century.
On the other hand
 , every
things
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thing
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 have positive and negative sides than clothes cars and other expensive
itmes
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items
 do not give happiness, healthy and
other feeling
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another feeling
other feelings
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 so some
people
 do not
interesting
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interested
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them
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in them
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 they only want to
life
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live
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 happy with their
famil
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family
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For instance
, one day l read about rich men and poor men book so
this
 book wrote one of the
page
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pages
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. Expensive
things
does
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do
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 not bring happiness. So every person
think
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thinks
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 that
peace
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peaceful
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 life.
To sum up
, most
people
 would like to buy modern
things
it
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apply
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that
good
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are good
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 but they forgot
healthy
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about healthy
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, happiness and love. l try to
answers
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answer
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 the question l hope my answer like you.
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