More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items with famous brands. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

Many
people
would like to buy clothes,automobiles other
things
with
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popular brands. It is
positive
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a positive
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idea because
people
want to try
good
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live
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but it has negative sides. Nowadays, Most
people
want to be modern clothes , modern cars and other modern
things
because they feel that
this items
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this item
these items
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help for
good
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a good
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live
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life
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in
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apply
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this
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these
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days so they always try
to
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them. It is
good
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a good
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idea because every person loves
yourself
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themselves
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,
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for example
, my husband in
this
peson
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person
he likes modern
things
so my
famil
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family
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live
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good
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well
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.
Than
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Then
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this thing
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this
things
must every person for
good
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the good
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life in
this
century.
On the other hand
, every
things
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thing
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have positive and negative sides than clothes cars and other expensive
itmes
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items
do not give happiness, healthy and
other feeling
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another feeling
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so some
people
do not
interesting
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interested
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them
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in them
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they only want to
life
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live
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happy with their
famil
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family
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For instance
, one day l read about rich men and poor men book so
this
book wrote one of the
page
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pages
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. Expensive
things
does
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do
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not bring happiness. So every person
think
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thinks
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that
peace
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peaceful
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life.
To sum up
, most
people
would like to buy modern
things
it
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apply
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that
good
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are good
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but they forgot
healthy
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about healthy
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, happiness and love. l try to
answers
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answer
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the question l hope my answer like you.
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