The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons.
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The bar chart shows the scores of three
teams
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, A,
B
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and
C
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, in four consecutive seasons. It is evident from the chart
that
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team
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B
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scored far higher than the other two
teams
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over the seasons, though their score decreased as a whole over the period. In 2002, the score of
team
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B
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far exceeded that of the other two
teams
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, standing at 82
points
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compared to only 10 for
team
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C
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and a very low 5 for
team
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A. Over the next two years, the
points
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for
team
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B
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decreased quite considerably, dropping by around half to 43 by 2004, but they still remained above the
points
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for the other
teams
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.
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, though
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team
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teams
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A and
C
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's
points
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were lower, they were rising.
Team
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A’s
points
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had increased by 600% from 2002 to reach 35
points
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by 2004, nearly equal to
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team
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Team
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B
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.
Team
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C
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, meanwhile, had managed only a small increase over
this
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time. In the final year,
team
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B
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remained ahead of the others as their
points
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increased again to 55,
while
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team
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teams
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A and
C
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saw their point scores reverse and drop to 8 and 5 respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words teams, b, c, team, points with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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