The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons.
The bar chart shows the scores of three
teams
, A, B
and C
, in four consecutive seasons. It is evident
from the chart that
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apply
team
B
scored far higher than the other two teams
over the seasons, though their
score decreased as a whole over the period.
In 2002, the score of team
B
far exceeded that of the other two teams
, standing at 82 points
compared
to only 10 for team
C
and a very low 5 for team
A. Over the next two years, the points
for team
B
decreased quite considerably, dropping by around half to 43 by 2004, but they still remained above the points
for the other teams
. However
, though team
A and Fix the agreement mistake
teams
C
's points
were lower, they were rising. Team
A’s points
had increased by 600% from 2002 to reach 35 points
by 2004, nearly equal to team
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Team
B
. Team
C
, meanwhile, had managed only a small increase over this
time. In the final year, team
B
remained ahead of the others as their points
increased again to 55, while
team
A and Fix the agreement mistake
teams
C
saw their point scores reverse and drop to 8 and 5 respectively.Submitted by odod_aja on
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