The pie chart below shows the frequency of U.S. Adults’ online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferences.

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spending habits in online shopping in the United States of America in 2015, but the bar chart displays the proportion of detail division regarding online buying preferences.

Overall

, the majority of juveniles less often buy goods online in the USA ,

while

the rest usually access online shopping a few times a month even never.

In addition

, there are the least groups using online shopping only at the weekend,

while

there was a high percentage of less frequent online

shoppers

buying directly in-store and the least was buying online. Looking into detail,

it is clear that

there was a high portion of teenagers who less often bought goods online, accounting for 37 %, followed by some who accessed online platforms a few times a month (28%) and who never purchased things online (20%) respectively.

Furthermore

, only the least who weekly use online shopping stated 15 %.

Moreover

, there was 80 % of

people

who buy directly in shops less frequently use online shopping.

In addition

people

always using online shopping contributed approximately 63 %, followed by

people

purchasing online monthly at around 59 % and

people

as weekly

shoppers

were the least only contributing 33 %.

While

62 % of juveniles as weekly

shoppers

tend to buy online , followed by monthly

people

(42%) and all online

shoppers

(33%) respectively. The least frequent online

shoppers

only donate just 19 % of the total.

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The pie chart below shows the frequency of U.S. Adults’ online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferences.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

have your experience any festival or occasion in different country ? What type of experience you have learnt from it ?

Universities should accept equal numbers of men and women in every subject. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Science is important in the 21st century. How do you think it could be made more appealing to young people?

Prevention is better than cure" Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree.