Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is sometimes believed that increasing the minimum legal age for driving vehicles allows
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growing road
safety
.
This
essay strongly disagrees with
this
suggestion for
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several
reasons. The first argument given to support my idea is that driving
safety
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is the best solution. To be precise, the perfect measure to decrease car accidents is teaching students about
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when driving cars.
For instance
, every week, schools can have a topic related to road
safety
that pupils can join in.
As a result
, schoolgoers can have
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to
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driving vehicles. Another point behind my belief is that advertisements of
safety
in transportation.
Instead
of minimum legal age, the
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government
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advertisement
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which
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a
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content about
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car accidents or experiences when driving.
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, releasing tv shows of transportation stories that an audience can notice about it.
Thus
, residents can have a concern about driving
safety
. In conclusion, I totally disagree that minimum legal age for driving vehicles is the best way to
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road
safety
given the aforementioned arguments.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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