IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Nowadays, more and more children are being brought up in single parents family. What are the cause of this? What effect can be seen as a result of this?

#children #parents #effect
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Lately, I have seen many
children
Use synonyms
 who were risen by single
parents
Use synonyms
 ever before. There are many factors but, one of the reasons that I can think of is both
parents
Use synonyms
 are too busy at work
therefore
Linking Words
, there is no time to share their opinions or emotions to solve issues,
additionally
Linking Words
, now, women can provide for their kids. As I mentioned, when we are exhausted, we tend to get aggressive easily towards others. Even though we are sad or lonely, we sometimes express ourselves with anger that destroys our relationships.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, Nowadays, Women are allowed to work like men and can bring money for their
children
Use synonyms
.
That is
Linking Words
 why we do not hesitate to get divorced, like in the past years. Obviously, raising
children
Use synonyms
 on their own is not easy but, constantly having an argument is equally stressful or even more.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, people think bringing up
children
Use synonyms
 by single
parents
Use synonyms
 can affect them to become subtly insecure. My friend who was risen by a single mum, used to be cried or be angry on some days especially, on parent's day at school. she was looking for her mum who could not make it because of her work to provide for the kid.
However
Linking Words
 as she grew up, her mind became steady. Her goal was to marry a decent man. she is 29 years old and is a wife and three
children
Use synonyms
 of a mother. What I propose is that her struggle at an early age made her stronger and more focused on what she wanted in the future.
To sum up
Linking Words
, It is true that many single
parents
Use synonyms
 exist nowadays, and
also
Linking Words
 can affect
children
Use synonyms
 in good ways or bad ways.
Submitted by mof.v914 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: