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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter, remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job

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Dear Sir, Hope your health and your family is good. My name is Gursewak Singh and If you remember
last
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 month , We both travelled on the same airline and I sat next to your seat.
Moreover
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, you talked about your
restaurant
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 business and At that time you gave me a chance to get a job in your
restaurant
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. Actually, When I came home I was talking with my mom and dad about a job opportunity.
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, I believe that I would be really good as a
chief
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chef
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 in
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restaurant
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the restaurant
a restaurant
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. Because I have not only cooking skills I have certificates and degrees
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 in
restaurant
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 line. To hance with
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, I hope you will remember me and I will receive a good reply from you. Thanks.
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coherence
Consider revising the opening paragraph to make it smoother and more professional. For example, 'I hope this letter finds you well.'
cohesion
Make sure to use appropriate punctuation and avoid run-on sentences. Breaking the text into clearer sentences will improve readability.
task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task, including when and where you met, the type of job you are interested in, and why you are suitable for it.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chain of restaurants
  • potential job opportunity
  • relevant experience
  • managerial role
  • customer service
  • qualifications
  • certifications
  • unique skills
  • eagerness
  • admiration
  • resume
  • references
  • face-to-face meeting
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