Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some people argue that learning could improve
intelligence
while
others believe that it is hereditary. In my opinion,
intelligence
could have development if is nurtured properly
although
inherited genes could have a crucial role.
On the other hand
, those people that think
intelligence
is innate might have thought of those individuals that were inclined towards music and arts.
This
is because they may have inherited their talents and creativity from their parents or another member of the family.
For example
, Beethoven is one of the greatest and most influential composers in history. His exceptional talent must have come from his father and grandfather, who were both musicians in their own right which influenced him to produce unforgettable and most admired compositions of all time.
Although
genetics may play some part, I believe that these individuals still need nurturing because, without the knowledge, their skills will not be honed and will not change overnight. Those who argue that
intelligence
can develop may have thought about those whose knowledge was
further
improved by reading and being a keen observer. They could
also
gain
intelligence
through their experiences that greatly affect how they perceived other matters in life.
For example
, Ben Carson was an American pediatric neurosurgeon before becoming a politician. During his childhood, he performed poorly but
due to
his mother's persistence, he found the love of learning and studying.
Although
, he was not the most intelligent among other doctors, his love of learning enables him to acquire many achievements and the most prominent was he became the head of pediatric neurosurgery at John Hopkins Hospital. I think that when an individual has the determination and persistence to develop their knowledge and skills nothing will impossible. In conclusion, even though biological inheritance could influence a person's
intelligence
, I believe that nurturing them could
further
stimulate their intellect.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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