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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is no doubt that these days, the rising of
convenience
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foods
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 is helping people to keep up with the rapid development of the modern lifestyle. The question at hand is, are the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
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 essay aims to explore both pros and cons and eventually, I will provide my analysis and draw a conclusion. In terms of advantages , the existence of
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foods
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 helps various people to get suitable meals and maintain their
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 and money . The main reason given to support
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 claim is
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 the rapid speed in our daily life , there is not enough
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 for people to prepare their
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 ,especially employees and students so, buying
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 kind of
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 will facilitate their lives and help them to manage their
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 . To illustrate , if someone in a diet , he needs specific meals that contain a number of calories ,
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 buying
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food
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 from the market will help him to have various choices .
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, adopting
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foods
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 has a number of drawbacks .
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, it may not be a healthy
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. In other words, it may consist of some substances to keep it for a long
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 .
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, its costs may be expensive .
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, it may not be available for all.
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 is because it will just be found in big markets . In conclusion,
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 adopting
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foods
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 in the speed and modern lifestyle has various negative aspects, I wholeheartedly believe that the positive aspects exceed them.
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