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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps depict the approaching roads to a
city
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 hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, the facilities have not changed much. The variation includes a
bus
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 station, roundabout, and separate staff and public parking. In the south of the
city
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 hospital in 2007,
City
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Road
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 reached the hospital avenue.
Therefore
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 ended on the ring
road
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.
Furthermore
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, on both sides of the hospital highway, there were six
bus
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 stops.
Additionally
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, the car park was located on the east of the hospital
road
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 and was usable for both staff and the public. In 2010, the hospital
road
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 ended at the hospital from above and
City
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Road
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 from below by roundabouts. On the right side of
hospital
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the hospital
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 ,
road
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 the 3
bus
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 stops have been demolished and new
bus
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 stations were located on the west of the hospital
road
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. It leads to both roundabouts ,
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Moreover
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,Moreover
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 a staff car park has been located on the east of the hospital
road
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 and a public car park has been transferred to the right-hand side of the hospital.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, bus, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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