Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child’s education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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parents prefer
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for their
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during
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time to other
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, I agree with other people
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that
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is
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children
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since it helps
children
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to improve their knowledge. In
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primary
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lesson
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academics
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and provide relevant examples from my knowledge.
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with, Nowadays
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are taught different
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in order to learn at schools. They
study
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six days a week every day.
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they spend more
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time
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they are given homework so as to do
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home. In fact, academic
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are educated more times than
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ones.
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,
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study
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academic
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such
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as mathematics, physics, chemistry and others
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four or five times a week.
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physical
lessons
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are taught a few hours a week.
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children
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are bored with
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.
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they are not interested in doing their
lessons
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. Another reason is that if
pupils
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study
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only
academics
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at
school
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these
lessons
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drive them stress and nervous. Even though they can impact their health.
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, some of the private schools teach
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to
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.
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it
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them bored and lazy. After
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principles at private schools decided to add physical
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due to
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the fact that they help
pupils
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' knowledge to improve. Indeed, it worked well.
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began to be interested in doing their academic
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at
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and home. In conclusion, some
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the
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people think that
PE
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is
more
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a more
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important lesson than
other
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others
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.
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However
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others claim that
academics
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are more important than
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. I side with
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is
also
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essential
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an essential
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subject for
children
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. It helps
children
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to improve their other
subjects
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at
school
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.
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